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In my office, I moved pencils around with my hoof. Watching them roll down only to have me catch it. It didn't take me long to climb the ranks with the Wonderbolts. In a span of over a year I was in the same position as Soarin and Spitfire. I looked out my window, seeing her drilling the new recruits. Can't say we saw this many new faces before without Gilda's help

Despite our ranks, Gilda always held top command. She would say I was her right Talon Mare but that only made me feel like all my hard work went to nothing if she was more important than us. I sighed, tapping my hoof on the floor anxiously. She told me she had a surprise for me and my stomach was doing all sorts of flips as each passing second hit me with more intense waves of anticipation and anxiety.

If you're wondering why I'm nervous, yes it is because I am suspecting only my wildest fantasies. That Gilda has somehow brought...her to join us. Or something along the lines of Fluttershy. It had been a year and I have not heard from her at all. Not letters..nothing. Pinkie Pie and the girls wrote to me, and I would come to Ponyville to visit but there was no Fluttershy.

I didn't ask, and they didn't tell. It was a mutual thing. They didn't want to tell me, and I certainly did not want to know. Ignorance is bliss, right?

Finally, the door opened but it was only Cloudy, pretending to sweep. I rolled my eyes, with a slight smile.

"Yeesh, haven't you heard of knocking?" I asked, resting my head on my hooves. She looked up for only a second, raising an eyebrow.

"You look a bit uptight through the window, I figured it was because your office was a bit dusty." she said, laughing. "Thought I'd come by and clean it up." Cloudy continued to go about sweeping, taking extra special care and taking her sweet ass time. She knew how to take my mind off things, if only for a second.

I rolled my eyes. "Thanks. But you know why I'm like this." I said, biting my bottom lip. I got up from my chair and strolled over to the window, looking at the new ponies. Their faces contorted in pain, panting heavily. I could see Soarin and Spitfire urging them on, screaming at each passing pony to go go go. I shook my head and smiled. I remember when that was me. I knew the ponies with the determination on their faces would make it. I was lost in my thoughts of the past before Cloudy spoke up.

"Aye. I don't think it's fair of Gilda to tell you she has something for you, and completely brush off what it could be." she grumbled, taking out her duster now and began working on the book shelves. I turned to her, shrugging.

"Yeah she likes keeping me on edge, I guess." I said with a small smile. "Besides, it can't be that bad, can it?"

My heart skipped a beat when I saw Gilda through my window as she had her wing over a pony. I began to panic. I knew those weren't her colors, but my mind likes to torture me and I assumed it was her. I rushed over near the door, then backed up a bit, adjusting myself and standing upright. Cloudy immediately ceased her dusting and walked out the door, before giving me one last glance. She despised Gilda and avoided her as much as possible. I wish I had the luxury to run away from her. As soon as I saw Gilda walk to the door, I stood upright, giving her a salute. Why I gave a salute to a Griffin with absolutely no rank was beyond me. But she commanded it.

"At ease." she said, waving her talon at me. My heart pounded in my chest and I could hear it through my ears, nevertheless, I never moved from my stance.

"What was the important surprise you had, Gilda?" I asked flatly, looking dead at her.

Gilda plopped down, still looking gigantic though and relaxed her wings. Out from behind her came a scrawny looking Pegasus with a red coat and a golden mane. He looked around my office, with an almost unimpressed, dull expression.

"This is Maroon Fly" she said, lowering her golden eyes to meet mine. I didn't try to hide the disappointment, yet relief in my tired eyes as I brought my hoof to my chin.

"Why'd you bring me him?" I asked in a monotone droll.

Gilda opened her beak to speak, but the Colt spoke up. "Uhm, do you even know who I am??" his tone condescending, as his green eyes narrowed at me. "I thought you were gonna teach this one some manners, Gilda." he said sarcastically.

Gilda cringed, but eased up and let out a smile. "Yeah she's a feisty one." and they both shared a mean laugh.

By this point I was steaming as I slammed my hoof down. "Pardon me, do you know who you are talking to??" I barked, marching right toward his face. My face, literally inches from his, stared down at the boy. "I don't know, and I don't care who you are. Anypony who talks like that to a commanding officer around here gets 500 laps around the track, do I make myself clear??"

Gilda began to instinctively put her wing between us, and slowly pushed me away. "Not this one, his brother paid us quite a pretty bit to get him in here, and he's already graduated and a Wonderbolt. You can talk to him like you talk to Spitfire, or Soarin." she said, looking down at the now smug looking Pegasus.

My jaw dropped. "You mean I had to work my flank off to get to where I am, and he just passes through basic training and already has a rank among us, just like that?!" I gasped. Gilda nodded.

"I know it's a lot for you to wrap your head around but my brother is an important pony. And what he wants, he gets. He wanted his precious brother to finally earn his cutie mark so I came here for some hard work and discipline." Maroon Fly strolled about my office, as if he owned it, then turned to me, shrugging. " know, hard work and all that isn't really my thing. You understand, don't you?" he said with a smile.

I stormed in front of him, slamming my hooves on the ground. "At least in this office, you will be treated as you are. Somepony who cheated their way through the Academy just because their brother is someone important. And Gilda, we need to talk. now." I hissed, pointing my hoof at her. I have yelled at her before but this time I was livid.

Maroon stood there casually, before I turned my head to him, slapping him on the rear. "Alone! Get out of my site, Parasprite!" I hissed. The pony merely narrowed his eyes and trotted out.

"Just wait until my brother hears about how I've been treated. This is ridiculous!" he walked over by Gilda. "I'll be outside, but I do hope you teach this one some manners." and with that he was out. It was just me and the Griffin.

I let the air cool down for a few seconds before letting out a sigh, beginning to speak. "Gilda, that is wrong on all levels. And when Spitfire and Soarin find out you let a pony bribe you-"

"Spitfire and Soarin know." she said flatly, preening her feathers. I paused, my ears lowering.

"What?" I choked out.

"They know. But unlike you, they respect their manager and know that they could get their rank ripped right from their shirt of they spoke up against me." she slowly walked over to me, looking down at my badges and pins.

"And you know if we weren't together, you'd be down to a basic recruit like the rest of them, if not expelled from the Academy." she said in a menacing tone. I narrowed my eyes at her, trying to fight back tears.

"Who in Equestria is his brother anyway?!" I barked, demanding an answer. "Who is he where he has enough money to pay this Maroon Fly character's way through flight school!?" just saying that out loud filled me with rage.

Gilda scratched her talon on the floor. "If you don't know Maroon Fly, you'll certainly know his brother. Ever hear of RedRobin?"

My ears lowered. "Ugh, yeah." I said, with bile in my voice. "We went to Flight School together. He was a bigger show off and egomaniac than me. And now just because he can sing and fly at the same time he's famous. So what?" it took me a minute but then my eyes widened. I slowly turned to her.

"Are you saying that his brother is...?"

Gilda nodded slowly. "Yes, we are in the midst of a celebrity. So be on your best behavior." she said, running her cold talon through my mane. I slowly cringed away, turning away from her.

"But Gilda... bribery...? We are so above that. So so SO above that." I said weakly. Although I shouldn't be surprised. This is Gilda we're talking about.

She let out a crow as she flapped her feathers a bit in an aggravated fashion. "I did it for the bolts! I did it for us! Do you know how much bits we got out of this? We have enough to recruit just as many ponies!" she said. "Not only can we be the best damn performers in Equestria, we can be the best defenders in the world!" she raised her talon, scratching her chest. "Don't you want that for this? Or is your selfish childhood rivalry really going to cloud your judgement?"

Angrily, I turned to her, narrowing my purple eyes. I stared into her gold ones. I swear as my eyes got duller, her eyes got more bright with ambition. Their flames burned through my icy wall quickly. I didn't want to argue with her right now. I was just fed up with the corruption.

"If you keep letting ponies buy their way in, we won't have a fighting force. We will have a band of rich snotty brats who think they can do whatever they want."

Gilda's face relaxed, and nodded. "You're right, Dash." she said.

My ears perked up, and I felt myself smile. "You think so...?"

Gilda nodded. "Yeah. Only the really rich should join the Wonderbolts, think of the money we could make!" then she through her head back and let out that scary bird laugh she does. It was mixed in with squawks and throaty chuckles. She leaned down and kissed me on the cheek, which sent a shiver down my spine.

"Ahhh you're a funny one, Dash. I'm only teasin'..." she walked over to the door, letting herself out. "Orrrr am I?" she gave me a jack-o-lantern smile and waved goodbye before walking out, shutting the door behind her.

I stood in the silence of my office and allowed the dim light to comfort me. I slowly walked back over to my desk and slid down into my chair, sighing. That bird brought so much stress on me. Every time I talked to her, it was as if my body was in fight or flight mode. And as much as I wanted to just fly, my pride made it in fight mode. I looked in my drawer and dropped two seltzer tablets in a glass of water and watched them sizzle to calm my stomach. I'd go out and join Soarin and Spitfire in a minute and have a talk with them. There was no way they were okay with this. At least not Spitfire! She was such a powerful mare and it's as if Gilda is trying to strip everypony here of their self confidence. I still held onto mine. Barely, but it was there...

I took a small sip of my seltzer water when I knew I'd be at peace for a few minutes and let myself relax. My wings fell at my sides and I rested my head on my desk. Among all my files, all my "inspirational" pictures in frames, and all the other nick knacks on my desk I had but one hidden. I lifted pages of my large Calender and lifted away month, after month, after month until I got to last year. This time last year, I was still crying every night over that mare from Ponyville. Now, I don't even cry at all unless it's something Gilda does.

I can already tell this Maroon Fly Colt and I won't get along...but I didn't want to think about that right now. I'll worry tomorrow.
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MayRothwell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
I think... That either rd is gonna find out Fluttershy and rr are a thing or ... Actually that is what I think..
Cityofbones0 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014
Whoa, what? A year gone by, just like that? No warning?
And since when did Rainbow start allowing Gilda all up on her like that?

I seem to remember Dash thinking that she wasn't going to let her team roll like this, under Gilda. Guess that was an idle threat.
Rainbow, you say that you still have a shred of your old mojo, and then you just let Gilda and some snotty rich pony stomp all over you like that? I thought it was made canon that RD and Gilda were no longer on good terms after she was all mean to the main six, how could RD possibly be tolerating this?!
TheBigM585 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
Just..... WOW ...
SpartaAndHerNamine Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Fluttershy's boyfriend brother met Rainbowdash? awwwwwwww shit. shit is about to get real in here
Ollie-C Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013
"I did it for the bolts! I did it for us! Do you know how much bits we got out of this?" UMM YOU MEAN HOW MANY BITS?!?! XD Jk just a grammar mistake
KiraOnline Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Maroon is...
And Rainbow's ex is...

siathedragon Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
rainbow just met fluttershys boyfreinds brother,shits going down
amandaam Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
what if rainbow finds out that fluttershy is going out with red!
AnimalAmelia16 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really good chapter!!
SPA7X Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
Maroon Fly.
Maroon Five.
*Dies a little inside.
TheBadLuckCharm Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
I need the next chapter now!!! This is awesome!
RaenBoow Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Gooood! Shifting our eyes further into the future :D
sami897 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
Love your story mate! Its been too long and i'm beyond excited that your spirits are back on writing again. Keep fighting the power man, you rock!
pinecat Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Can't. Wait. For. Next. Chapter. Going. To. Die! (poor Dashie, still missing her dear Shy~)
BlazeODU Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
This story continues to get more and more depressing. I hope something good happens soon, or this story will end up being in "Tragedy Genre" mode. And when that happens, I am not looking forward to what kind of ending this story has in store for us.
Amyraia Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Hey wait a Moment.... where are gildas claws? :0 dont She have 2 claws instead of paws (is this the word for it)?

(I'm laying in bed,i'm tired so sry for my english :D )
TrueOkamiAmaterasu Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
you mean where are her talons, griffins have bird talons on the front and lion paws in the back, in this one it doesn't look like she has talons, it looks like she has lion paws on the front and back
Amyraia Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Damn!! I need the Next chapter ;_;

Love this story <3

Hope rd and fluttershy will meet each other again ..:<
asluc96 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh! its been a little while since the last one, good job as always!
I hope RD will met her again eventually, since she may have to meet RedRobin because of his brother. Well played :D
foolyguy Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Another great chapter~ I'm totally on edge to see what will come next! Love the art you do for each chapter as well.
GarethJason Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
*opens Deviant Art and sees all the deviations he missed* *5 pages..* *Clicks through them all and sees the name Bread-Crumbz* O.O *clicks* *new story update*:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
ReadReadReadReadReadRead :P
Ano170 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
Things are coming to head! *excited squee*

One thing though, not sure if someone has pointed this out already but you seemed to switch tenses a lot in this chapter, jumping between "is" and "was" several times in the same sentence. It got a little confusing, at least for my silly little brain.
David-Irastra Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
omg the smell of smoke is on the air... i wonder where is the fire?

great job BC!
gunnar121 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
As I see it, Gilda keeps "flirting" with RD even though RD despises her, because she knows if she tried to stop her, Gilda would remove her, regardless of her skill, right?
Lexvstee Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
I can't enjoy this anymore, out of left field something that doesn't make sense...

screw it... -.-
Deelfinoiy Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Gilda and Rainbow officially together, as in a relationship? Did I miss something and has this been implied over the last few episodes with Dash, or did we just find out now? Maybe I'm just slow. :XD:
lemuractionnews Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm in the same boat.
JakeJonRoberts Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
One thing. You keep switching back and forth between past and present tense.

Needless to say, it's distracting.
Bread-Crumbz Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I knoowwww D: im sorry about that! I do it to sort of progress forward only because it will help them reunite quicker and I feel like it going day by day will drag it on. I know this was a big leap..but it will definitely slow down now :>
JakeJonRoberts Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
I think you're confused. I don't mean story-wise. I mean TENSE. Past and Present tense, LOOK IT UP! Switching back and forth between past and present tense is NOT OKAY. It's distracting.
Bread-Crumbz Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
okay well I'll keep an eye on that, thank you!
DolphinBuster Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
RedRobin. That colt is nothing but trouble, and now he has a brother? The trouble has been doubled...

Anyway, yeah I hate RedRobin. But I was actually getting kind of worried about Rainbow and how she was doing with the Wonderbolts...and now it appears it just got worse, making the plot thicken with conflict. Though it may seem like a bad thing with Maroon Fly being a Wonderbolt, and RedRobin pretty much taking advantage of Fluttershy; I think I see a connection, and if the points keep going as it is... we'll eventually reach the intercept.

Can't wait till the next chapter, you still have my full attention. :iconpinkiesmileplz:
Bread-Crumbz Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Wow thanks! Yes, that is why I do have RedRobin's brother coming into RD's story which means the two WILL interact at some point. X3
kdalips Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
The immeasurable love that Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash once shared gave me so much happiness. Now, with the total annihilation of the love, I think that the mane reason that I keep reading is to see what happens when Fluttershy and RD inevitably meet again.

Though I would love to see them work it out... I don't really think that'll happen.

You, Bread-Crumbz, are a terrific writer.
Bread-Crumbz Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Awww thank you! Well, keep in mind that RedRobin's brother is now here...which means at some point RedRobin and RD will interact, which means Fluttershy and RD will interact :o gasp
DarknessHedgehog367 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Yes, because I recall hearing Fluttershy was going to Canterlot with RedRobin....hmmm

This is really good to, I don't regret watching you!
Oh yeah: [link] Please read/check these out!
r3inb0w-dash Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
so far my favorite one ^_^ Now not only do I hate Red Robin but I also hate Maroon Fly
ComposerOfMoonlight Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oooooh, things are about to get interesting! Dum dum dum!
Angel-chi Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Enjoying this fanfic so very much..but at the same time I feel so bad for Rainbow. Are Gilda and Rainbow being shipped? Ohgoshpleasepleaseno. Your writing is so good I'd read it anyway, but....*cries*
Ano170 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
I'm pretty sure Gilda is sexually harassing Dash, only Dash just has to put up with it since Gilda could kick her out of The Wonderbolts, or, being a griffon, eat her for breakfast with ketchup.
thunderbolt3000 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
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thunderbolt3000 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Ha, Yea ...
zaiali Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
I don't really like Rainbow

But, this character just beats her by a LOOONG SHOT in the worst character ever category. Right beside Gilda.
NintendoGal55 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Letting recruits BUY their way into the Wonderbolts! That's just terrible. I can definitely see Rainbow Dash getting angry over something like that, for sure. She definitely is the kind of pony who would strongly believe that working your flank off and having talent should be what counts to get into the Wonderbolts or any kind of athletic team. But then to see somepony who just shells out a few bucks and just barely qualifies just waltz right in without having to life a hoof? Terrible.

And now it's been a year. Oh my. It seems Rainbow still has inklings of feelings remaining, but she's pretty much just over everything and moving on. Pretty much in a way that sounds like she feels she has no choice, and her pride is just keeping her going. Now she's trapped. Trapped in a bitter reality of what her dreams once were. :<

I surely hope she'll work things out...:cries:
XoXPeaceHeartXoX Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is getting epic.
sithwolf Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you brought in a slacker in front of one of the hardest working pegesi in all cloudsdale.... oh this is going to end in fire and brimstone and robbin boys pay check but a nice little conecter and the story of thus far is already unfolding in my little head.

great work crubz i'm glad your back and writing again :iconbrohoofplz:
Bread-Crumbz Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
thank you very very much :D
sithwolf Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
np np
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